Wednesday, December 22, 2010
Persuasive Argument
We gather here today wondering what is going to happen next. Well, a few nights ago a man named Sir Danvers Carew was frightfully murdered by that cruefully Mr. Hyde with a maid as an eyewitness. She was enjoying life and a few minutes later, BOOM! she is passed out by what she sees. No one ever wants that to happen to them at anytime. We all know that Mr. Hyde is also Dr. Jekyll and that Dr. Jekyll will never do such a thing so we can't punish him, BUT Mr. Hyde will. If he isn't behind bars we won't be able to trust Dr. Jekyll because he will either drink his potion or make a new one. You see jury, even though Dr. Jekyll is a good man, Mr. Hyde is not so he can't be trusted. Here I pleed Mr. Hyde guilty of the murder. I aslo pleed Dr. Jekyll guilty for bringing this man alive.
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Good starting point for your writing/speech. You are on the right track with the point of view you should be writing in (attorney speaking to the jury). I think you need to consider a more powerful, captivating beginning and ending statement. This is a very important moment because the jury will pay attention most to this part. The middle of your writing/speech should have distinct/separate (by paragraph separations) reasons for prosecuting Hyde. Your first reason seems to be the facts of the case (evidence, eye witnesses). Remember to elaborate on these facts by being as specific as possible. Use direct quotes from the eyewitness. Remember this needs to sound realistic. Your next reason for prosecuting Hyde appears to be the uncertainty of science and the danger that it poses to society. Again support this with specific moments, facts, and quotes from the story. Your final reason is kind of unclear. I think you are trying to say that Dr. Jekyll is also to blame, but that kind of takes the blame off of Hyde because you are saying that Jekyll was actually in control. You might want to rethink this. Try revisiting what you know about Victorian society. What did this society care most about? Try developing a final reason that is based on their common values, morals, and maybe even fears. A final hint: try watching some courtroom TV dramas or view clips of these types of shows on youtube. Notice some of the formal legal language and phrases. Notice how powerful and emotional the language is that convinces the jury. Best of luck.
ReplyDeleteyea. I think they are both to blame because Dr. Jekyll is the one who wants to change into this man from time to time and Mr. Hyde chooses to be bad. Later on, Dr. Jekyll won't have control over Mr. Hyde and soon enough, he will be Mr. Hyde forever and that can't happen. If it were to happen, Mr. Hyde would be locked up forever. I still am alittle stuck for the last reason.
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